Finally, I got a glimpse of her
And everything else got blurred.
Her hair was in a bun
With loose strands falling on her face.
She was crossing the road looking sideways.
Unaware of my presence, like always.
Everyday I would wait for her at the stop like a ritual
Everyday she would pass me and hop on her bus like usual.
But something different happened today.
While walking she tripped and fell down.
I reached hurriedly to her
She was looking all around with a frown
And suddenly her eyes met mine
And with an amused expression she started laughing
It was the most beautiful sound I had ever heard.
And I could not stop but join her.
For the first time she was aware of my presence.
Super awesome!!!
Amazing write up, it literally drops us in imagining the events happening.
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Thanks Akshay for such a nice comment. Glad you liked it
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Very nice. And sounds like the start of something magical. ๐
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Thanks. I like this line start of something magical ๐
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Interesting to read something written by a girl from a guy’s perspective. Very well written!!!
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Hahaha. Hope it came out well.
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It is very nicely written!!
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Thanks.
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Are wah!! Kya baat hai, one of the cutest beginning ๐คฉ.
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Hai na!. Thanks. Hope you enjoyed it.
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So, they went on date, ki bas khatam itna hi tha ๐ค
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Hahaha… Hum to date tak v nai gae. They only met and khatam
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๐๐ are ye to meri wali story se bhi bura huwa ๐, next time airport โ par fisal jana shayad baat aage badhe ๐๐
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Hahaha. Great idea. Par ye hum nai fisle hai.. fictional character hai๐๐
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Are dhokha ho gya, warna next time station pe baith k cute ladkiyon ๐ฉโ๐ผ k fisalne ka intezar karte ๐คฃ๐คฃ
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Lol.. saved your time ๐๐
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๐คฃ๐คฃ haan
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Well-written, amusing, and relatable poem. You are brave to write from a male point of view. I guess your male readers will let you know if you got it right! ๐ All the best! Cheryl
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Thank you Cheryl. Yeah I just wanted to write this from a different dimension.
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Well written and quite funny. Loved it
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Thank you so much.
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The pleasure is all mine
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Simply beautiful! I think this might be the start of a new journey ๐
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Thanks. Yes a start of something beautiful ๐
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Anytime ๐
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This is so amazing ๐๐๐
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Thank you so much๐
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Beautiful!
I adore the image, too
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Thank you so much ๐
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โค๏ธ
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What if it is a girl’s perspective? A girl falling in love with another girl? But, is it or is it not? Anyway, it’s lovely and heart warming๐ค
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I tried to write this from male perspective. But won’t mind the other interpretation too.
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Is that you?
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Haha. No ๐ฃ
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Lol..lovely๐๐โค
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Thanks ๐
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Aww…that was so sweet and adorable ๐๐คฉ
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Thanks. Happy you liked it.
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Always my pleasure ๐
Keep writing and inspiring โจโ๏ธ
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Your male protagonist is so sweet and cute ๐
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Thanks. That’s what I intended to.
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good catch and good poetry!!!
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Thanks Cindy ๐
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So Lively poetryโบ๏ธ
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Thank you Prakharโบ๏ธ
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Awww… The first time. I could imagine every line. Beautifully written! ๐
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Thank you so much. Yeah the start of something magical.
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Wow, this is amazing! Nice twist at the end. Sometimes, all we want is to be noticed. And that is perfectly okay. Love it ๐๐๐
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Yeah true. And sometimes its so hard to get that required attention.
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True. That makes it more worth it sometimes, though. โค
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Agree.
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Ayee! So beautiful!!
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Thanks Harsh โบ๏ธ
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Beautifully written, Yeshu. Khub bhalo. Ami padhkar bahot khushi hui.๐๐
So nicely you have described the whole scene that I saw both of them right from my eyes. And I also liked how the guy was so happy to be noticed by her.๐โจ
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Hahaha. Onek Dhonnobad Chetna. Your Khub Bhalo is on point. The second line we can improve๐
Yeah he was indeed happy to get the much required attention finally.
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I just wrote whatever came to my mind.๐ How do you say that?
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I must say nice try. You can say โAmi pore khub khusi holamโ
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Ohkk! I learned a new sentence today.๐
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Hey..Are you a โbangaliโ โฆ??
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Hey Tanisha. No i am not, but I am from Bengal, so I know basic Bengali. Guess you are Bangali.
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Yes I am…And Am from bengal..Kolkata๐
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Loved reading this. It feel good sometimes to be noticed. Attention sometimes may be wonderful. Excellent. ๐
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Thanks Harsh. Actually at times we all seek attention from that someone.
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Indeed. ๐
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Beautifully written
I was imagining the scene while reading !
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Thank you so much Era. Glad you enjoyed this post.
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Pleasure ๐
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Hope it all worked out. BTW, love the artwork!
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Even I am hoping the same.
The Artwork I took from Pinterest.
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What a lovely poem it is๐๐ค. I really enjoyed reading it. Thanks
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Thank you so much. I am happy you enjoyed reading this. โบ๏ธ
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What a lighthearted post ๐๐
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Appreciate you taking out time and reading it. Thanks Joana.๐
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Hey I nominated you for liebstar award please visit and check out
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Thanks for the nomination Aradhana. I am not much into award post. However if you want I can mail you my answers.
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As u wish dear but you deserve ..
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Thanks again. If you are ok, please share me your mail id. I will revert you with the answers.
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Ok dear kanhajee1111@gmail.com
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I think u should publish ur answer among of people..kanhajee1111@gmail.com
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This touched a chord within, a rather unused, rusted, but still alive chord. Thanks for bringing back amazing memories…lovely words…๐ค๐ค๐ค๐๐ต๏ธ๐ต๏ธ
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Thanks. I am really glad that this post reminded you of some sweet memories of the past. ๐ค๐ค
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Yeah..quite relatable I’m sure for a lot of guys…๐ค๐ค
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I was wondering if I have done justice to this post since I tried writing from guys perspective.
Thanks. This comment means a lot.
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You did really well. And you reassured me that women still believe in the innocent desires of love, something that’s lost nowadays, by our own evil doings. Thanks. Take care…๐๐
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Thanks Sundaram. Innocent love is the pure love. You too take care and have a nice day ahead.
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Ah, fate at last
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At last the beginning.
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๐๐๐ท
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โบ๏ธ๐
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๐โโ๏ธโ
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Great post!
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Thank you so much ๐
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Such a beautiful post!
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Thanks ๐.
How are you?
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I’m doing great! Thanks! ๐
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Good to know. Have a nice day ahead.
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And you as well!
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Wowwww Yeshuuuuuu๐
This is super amazing. I’m loving the way how you have written this.
It’s beautiful โจ
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Thank you so much Anushka. I wanted to write something light and full of love. Glad you liked it ๐
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Chemical reactions ๐๐ป๐๐๐ป
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Haha. Yes ๐
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Painting is very nice ๐๐ป๐๐๐ป
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I took it from Pinterest.
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Beautiful, words taken to that world
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Thanks Subbashini. Glad you liked it.
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This is so so beautiful!
It was like a short film played in front of me.
Your words were that beautiful and your character is lucky enough to have such a sweet admirer!โค๏ธ
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Thanks Hema for this wonderful comment. I am glad you liked this short storyโค๏ธ
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Amazing poem ๐
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Thanks Ashish
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Hi Yeshu, how are you doing?
Actually I read this piece the day you posted it, but I couldn’t comment on it.
But its never too late, I am here to tell you how I enjoyed reading this. I so loved how the guy described the girl, about her hair tied in a bun. It could be easily felt by the reader that how the writer here is adoring the girl. I could feel it all.
It’s a beautiful piece ๐
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Hey Rashmi. I am good. Hope the same for you.
And yeah its never too late. You comments are always welcome and appreciated. Thank you. I tried describing the girl from a guy’s point of view, really happy to know it came out well and you liked it.
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Beautifully written!
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Thanks Pooja ๐
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You’re welcome!
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Amazing write up โฅ๏ธ
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Thank you. Glad you like it โบ๏ธ
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This is such a heartfelt poetic tale! The yearning of a silent lover is so beautifully expressed here. Great writing. โค๏ธโค๏ธ
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Thanks for this kind comment Rishika. Really happy that you liked the post ๐
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This is so lovely and beautiful words imaginery, I have seen after a very long someone writing from the perception of opposite gender and I know it is somehow different as I have written a short story with female protagonist.
Great effort!๐๐๐๐
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You are right I was actually skeptical that whether I am getting the perspective right or not. So glad you liked it.
Do share me the link I would love to read that post.
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https://prashanttscribbled.wordpress.com/2020/07/21/will-meet-you-someday-life/?preview=true
Please share your remarks for the same๐
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Envisioning and so perfectly portrayed! Too good ya
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Thanks you. Really glad you liked this post.
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This was one of those cute little short story that makes me smile & then creates a permanent space for itself somewhere in my mind ๐๐
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Thank you so much Akriti for such a kind comment. Really glad you liked it this much.โค๏ธ
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Very beautiful๐๐ป
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So…Nice to meet you here..๐
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Sane here Tanisha ๐
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